It’s not “$10 million dollars.” It’s “$10 million” or “10 million dollars.” “$10 million dollars” is redundant.
It’s not “Hi Jane.” It’s “Hi, Jane.” This error makes the Grumpy Editor especially grumpy.
Using “said” as an adjective makes prose sound precious or pretentious. Unless you’re writing a contract or the dialogue for a pretentious or precious person, don’t do it.
To put someone through the wringer is to wring him out or make him suffer an equivalent agony. To put someone through the ringer is –– well, I guess it’s to slip him through a bell, which doesn’t make much sense.
When a character says, “I trust [someone] implicitly,” either the character doesn’t know what he’s saying or the writer doesn’t. “Implicitly” means implied, not stated outright. If you state outright that you trust someone implicitly, then you’re being explicit, not implicit, and what you’ve said is nonsense.
Don’t preface an explanation with “Let’s unpack that.” A useful phrase, but overused.
As a substitute, let me suggest:
“Let’s dismantle that.”
“Let’s untangle that.”
“Let’s clear that up.”
“What the bleeding hell was THAT?”
Yours in helpfulness,
The Grumpy Editor
davidleeseidman 
